Critique from Dan Koon
Jonathan,
Sorry I am replying in an e-mail but I could not for the life of me figure out how to simply add my critique. That site is difficult to navigate for the uninitiated such as myself.
To my knowledge you included all the reads in the CoS film except the LF, which I noted you were going to correct.
I have several comments on reads that I did not notice the first time I watched the film or else some of these reads were changed this time around:
a) the persistent F/N, instant F/N and FTA look awfully jerky. They appear to have body motion in them. I did not notice this earlier but it was distracting this time around.
b) the body motion looks too erratic. I did not notice this first time around, unless you changed the read.
c) the Stage 4 does not match the description in EME or rises, sticks, falls, always the same distance. I personally have never seen one and maybe knew one person who saw one once, so it is not important, I don't think, for practical purposes. Maybe Trey has seen one. Anyhow, if there is a way to mechanically create this, I think you could get a more accurate demonstration.
That is it. Your presentation, graphics, sfx and all look awfully damn good. As good as the church film. So, congratulations. I like the additional metab reads and F/Ns. They are useful.
Really well done!
Dan